单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,What is your trouble in getting a high score in,writing?,高考英语作文评分标准,第五档(很好)：(2125分),1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。,2.覆盖,所有,内容,要点,。,3.应用了,较多,的语法结构和词汇。,4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用,较复杂结构或较高级,词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。,5.有效地使用了语句间的,连接,成分，使,全文结构紧凑,。,6.完全达到了预期的写作目的。,content,language,organization,Dear Mr.Green,I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together.That sounds great!And I agree with you on that.,Some of the columns are really my cup of tea.Say,“culture express”gives us a better understanding of the world.Since people from different parts of the world have different values,it,s necessary to learn from each other.This will offer a wonderful chance.Apart from that,“blurt out,(,脱口而出）”is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English.,“entertainment”is so cool!The popular singers,actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely cant miss it!Teenagers are just fond of the,things.,Well,I cant list more.I really cant wait to read that magazine!,definitely,which you mentioned in the letter,Last but not least,trendy,Good,language,advanced and vivid,words,phrases and sentence patterns,sentence patterns,different and mixed,A piece of,high-score,writing should have,H,ow to,make the language,in writing,more advanced,By Lu Gang,1.It,is,clear,that he has got it.,2.,I,feel,so,worried,about my problem,.,Replace the italic red words with more advanced words,evident/obvious,distressed,/concerned,3.The,situation is,bad,.,4.,The,little boy was,afraid,of the dark,Way1:to use more advanced words.,awful/terrible,scared/fearful,Replace the italic red words with more advanced words,5.,I,hope,that,.,.,6.,I,sincerely hope,that,.,W,ay,2,:,to,use adverbs properly.,Compare and find the highlights,（亮点）,Translation:,7.,你将越来越受同学欢迎。,You will be,increasingly,popular,with your classmates.,8.,I,like the city because it has many places of interest.,9.,The,reason why I like the city is that it has many places of interest.,Compare and find the highlight,Way,3,：,to,us,e,some more advanced sentence patterns,Translation:,与他们分享你的故事非常重要,。,(,使用主语从句）,W,hat,is,extremely significant is that you should share your stories with them.,10.I like to stay alone.,11.Generally speaking,I like to stay alone.,Compare and find the highlights,W,ay4,:to use parenthesis(,插入语,),Complete the sentence:,（,最后但是同样重要的，）,I will help you expand your circle of friends.,Last but not,(the),least,12.If you are given more time,you will get in well with them.,13.Given more time,you will get in well with them.,Compare and find the highlights,Way5:,to use nonfinite verb(,非谓语动词,),Fill in the blank:With time,（,permit,）,I hope to take you to join our club.,permitting,14.You will have more friends in this way.,15.Only in this way will you have more friends.,Compare and find the highlights,Way6:to use inversion(,倒装）,to change,the word order(,语序,),Complete,the sentence:,Only _,(,只有当我们共同努力的时候,，,我,们可以改变这种局势。,),w,hen we work together can we change the situation.,Writing 1,:Hong Kong,is a lively city,and,Hong Kong,has relaxing beaches and fantastic shopping malls.,Writing 2:,Hong Kong,is a lively city.,There,are many relaxing beaches,.,It,s,fantastic shopping malls always,attract,many tourists.,Way,7,:,to,us,e,different forms of beginning,s,.,Compare and find the highlights,Way 1:to use more advanced words.,Way,2:,to use the adverbs properly.,Way 3:to,us,e,some more advanced sentence patterns,Way 4:,to use parenthesis(,插入语,),Way 5:,to use nonfinite verb(,非谓语动词,),Way 6,:,to use inversion(,倒装）,to change the word order(,语序,).,Way 7:,to,us,e,different forms of beginning,s,of sentences.,H,ow to,make your language more advanced in writing,假,设你是新华中学的学生李华，班里从外地转来一名同学李明，他一时无法融入到新的班集体中，感到很苦恼。,写作内容请根据下列要点用英语给他写封信：,（1）帮他分析原因：害羞，怕同学取笑。,（2）给他提出建议：学习普通话，跟同学交流意见。,（3）陈述你帮助他的具体打算。,注意：,1.词数：100左右；2.信的开头和结尾已给出,；,A writing requirement,Dear Li Ming，,I,m sorry to know that you,are in a bad situation and,feel sad at your new class.,Because,you,are,shy and you,are,afraid that your classmates will mak,e,fun of you.,It is clear.,You should learn to speak Putonghua and compar,e,notes with your classmate.,It is important for you to share your stories with them.If I have time I ll help you join in our club.,Ill,hope I can,help you make more friends.,We work together.,Improve the following writing,Work together to make the writing better,in groups,Dear Li Ming，,I,m sorry to know that you feel distressed at your new class.One of the reasons is that you might be too,bashful,to talk confidently with your classmates and the worry that your classmates will make fun of you is gathering around your head.,I,ts evident that,learning to speak Putonghua and comparing notes with your classmates frequently are good ways to make new friends.Nothing is more significant than,sharing,.,To help you,I,ll invite you to play basketball or go to some parties.Also,I,d like to introduce my good friends to you.,I sincerely hope you can adapt to the new sc