单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,市青年教师优质课比赛,新教材读后续写,市青年教师优质课比赛新教材读后续写,1,一、题型解读,根据所给的一段约,350,词的语言材料和段落的开头语进行约,150,词的续写，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。,提供的短文，多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。,就目前浙江卷的已考过的读后续写来看，都属于,“problem-solving”,的思路。,一、题型解读,2,二、评分标准,1.,与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；,2.,内容的逻辑性和丰富性；,3.,上下文的连贯性；,4.,文中语法结构和词汇的准确性、丰富性。,二、评分标准,3,1.,读懂原文,理清五个,W,和一个,H,：人物,who,、地点,where,、时间,when,、事件,what,、原因,why,及怎样发展,how,。,2.,构思情节，谋篇布局,(1),按原文中事件的发生，构思好合理的,“,下一步,”,情节，需符合逻辑。,三、解题步骤,1.读懂原文三、解题步骤,4,(2),利用续写部分给出的两个段落的首句进行布,局谋篇。,(3),这两句话起关键作用，时间的先后、情节的,发展都要以这两句话为内在逻辑关系。,(4),情节的安排，必须按照叙述的顺序，继续紧,密结合原材料中五,W,的逻辑顺序发展。,(5),两个段落要衔接紧密，相互关联，不能独立,存在。,(2)利用续写部分给出的两个段落的首句进行布,5,3.,优化语言,语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体、饱满。,3.优化语言,6,四、真题范例,阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。续写的词数应为,150,左右。,(2020,年,6,月浙江卷,)It was summer,and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.,We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in,the state of New Mexico.We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle Paul,my dads friend,picked us up from the airport and drove us up to,his farm in Pecos.,四、真题范例,7,His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens,while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(,吃草,).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They looked really cool.,His wife Tina cooked us a,8,In the afternoon,I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long as my dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks,the deep green pine trees,and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a beautiful woven(,编织的,)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.,In the afternoon,I asked,9,Paragraph 1,：,Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.,Paragraph 2,：,We had no idea where we were and it got dark.,Paragraph 1：,10,1.,审题与读懂原文。,解题示范,原文体裁,Narration(),Exposition(),Argumentation(),原文大意,In,_,my dad took me on,a trip to,_,visiting,his friend Uncle Paul,s,_,.We enjoyed the peaceful farm life and began a,_,.,horse ride,Summer,the Wild West,farm,1.审题与读懂原文。解题示范Narration(,11,原文六,要 素,Who,：,_,_,When,：,_,Where,：,_,_,What,：,_,_,_,Why,：,_ How:_,读懂续写,段落首句,圈出有用的词或可用于发展思路的词,Dad and I visited Uncle Paul,s farm,and we enjoyed the farm life and began a horse ride;,I,Dad,Uncle Paul,Uncle Paul,s,wife,Tina,summer;in the afternoon,the Wild West;Albuquerque,a big city in the state of New,Mexico;the farm in Pecos,/,/,Who：_ 读懂续写圈出有用的词或可用于发,12,2.,构思情节，谋篇布局。,根据第一步中所圈出可发展情节的词，并设计情节。,2.构思情节，谋篇布局。,13,填入与段落开头语中画线词有关的、你能想到的词,从四个方面设计情节，展开思路,Reason,：,Dialogue,：,Result,：,Feeling,：,Paragraph 1,：,Suddenly a little,rabbit,jumped,out in front of my,horse,.,答案不唯一，由学生讨论，言之有理即可,填入与段落开头语中画线词有关的、你能想到的词从四个方面设计情,14,Paragraph 2,：,We,had no idea where,we were and it,got dark,.,填入与段落开头语中,画,线词有关的、你能想到的词,从四个方面设计情节，展开思路,Reason,：,Dialogue,：,Result,：,Feeling,：,答案不唯一，由学生讨论，言之有理即可,Paragraph 2：We had no idea whe,15,3.,润色语言：,善用连接词、合理描述细节、使用各种句子结构：独立结构、分词做状语、从句等。,3.润色语言：善用连接词、合理描述细节、使用各种句子结构：,16,参考范文,Paragraph 1,：,Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.,This unexpected appearance frightened my horse,which made it run wildly.I tried my best to control it,but in vain.Frightened as I was,I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off.Fortunately,minutes later,the horse stopped before a river,out of breath,and so did I.At that moment,my dad also came up.Seeing I was OK,he was quite relieved.But it was clear that we got lost.,参考范文,17,Paragraph 2,：,We had no idea where we were and it got,dark.,We didn,t know where the farm house,was.What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly.But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation.Just as we were at the point of desperation,we heard a faint voice from the distance.“It must be Uncle Paul,”I said.So we cried back with excitement.Finally,Uncle Paul safely brought us back home.What an amazing ride!,Paragraph 2：,18,Thank you!,Thank you!,19,