单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,How to improve a chart writing,Writing,湖南省浏阳市第一中学英语组 冯玉荣,What activities do you usually have after school?,Survey,每天所用时间（分钟）,假如你是李华，最近你学校对中学生课余活动进行了调查，结果如下。请根据图表,1,提供的信息描述学生每天的课余活动，并针对图表,2,中一两个数据中反映的情况写出你的个人看法。标题和开头部分已给出，词数,120,左右,Chart 1:,学生主要课余活动及所用时间,Chart 2:,学生各项业余活动所占课余时间比例,After-school activities in our school,Recently,I have done a survey about the daily average amount of,time the students in my school spend on different after-school,activities.,.,每天所用时间（分钟）,学生主要课余活动及所用时间,How to describe a chart?,The chart/graph above,shows/describes,that,From the chart/graph we can,that,can be seen from the chart/graph that.,is shown/described in the chart/graph,(,根据）,the chart/graph,find out/learn/see,It,According to,As,学生各项业余活动所占课余时间比例,Translate the following sentences.,1.,我们学校的学生每天花,96,分钟做作业。,2.,看电视占用了,72,分钟。,3.24,分钟花在了电脑上。,4.,学生花了,10%,的课余时间用电脑。,5.,锻炼身体只占用了课余时间的,5%,。,Task 1,Task 2,1.,我们学校的学生每天花,96,分钟做作业。,2,看电视占用了,72,分钟。,3.24,分钟花在了电脑上。,4.,学生花了,10%,的课余时间用电脑。,5.,锻炼身体只占用了课余时间的,5%,。,The students in our school,.,Watching,TV,.,The students spend,their spare time,the computer.,Translate the following sentences.,Doing sports,.,spend 96 minutes every day in doing homework/on homework,takes up/occupies 72 minutes,on,takes up/occupies only 5%of the spare time.,How to describe a chart?,10 percent of/one tenth of/10%of,24 minutes,.,is spent on the computer,Task 2,Chart 2:,学生各项业余活动所占课余时间比例,Give your opinion about Chart 2,in my opinion,to my mind,From my point of view,I hold the view/opinion that,As far as I am concerned,Personally,I think,From Chart 1,we can learn that the students spend 96 minutes in doing homework.Watch TV takes up 72 minutes.They spend 36 minutes listen to music.24 minutes are spent on the computer.They only spend 12 minutes on sports.,Which is shown in Chart 2,the students only spend 5%their spare time on sports and they spend 30 percentage of their spare time on TV.I think they spend too much time on TV and too few time on sports.Thats not good for our healthy.I think the students should do more sports in their free time to build up their body.,A first-time writing,Proofreading,Task 3-pair work,From Chart 1,we can learn that,the students spend 96,minutes in doing homework.Watch TV takes up 72,minutes.They spend 36 minutes listen to music.24,minutes are spent on the computer.They only spend 12,minutes on sports.,A first-time writing,Watching,listening,is,Proofreading,Which is shown in Chart 2,the students only,spend 5%their spare time on sports and they spend 30,percentage of their spare time on TV.I think they,spend too much time on TV and too few time on sports.,Thats not good for our healthy.I think the students,should do more sports in their free time to build up,their body.,A first-time writing,of,percent,health,their,bodies,Proofreading,little,As,From Chart 1,we can learn that the students spend 96 minutes in doing homework.,Watching,TV takes up 72 minutes.They spend 36 minutes,listening,to music.24 minutes,is,spent on the computer.They only spend 12 minutes on sports.,As,is shown in Chart 2,the students only spend 5%,of,their spare time on sports and they spend 30,percent,of their spare time on TV.I think they spend too much time on TV and too,little,time on sports.Thats not good for,their health,.I think the students should do more sports in their free time to build up their,bodies.,The first revised writing,Modification,Is it a good writing?,Task 4,Words&Sentences,They spend 36 minutes listening to music.24 minutes,is spent on the computer.,They only spend 12 minutes on sports.,.the students only spend 5%of their spare time on sports and they spend 30 percent of their spare time on TV.,Modification-rewriting,They spend 36 minutes listening to music,24 minutes is spent on the computer.,it,.,.the students only spend 5%of their spare time on sports,(,然而，强调对比）,they spend,30 percent(of the time),on TV.,and,However,takes them 12 minutes to do sports,while,Task 4,I think they spend too much time on TV and too little time on sports.Thats not good for their health.,I think the students should do more sports in their free time to build up their bodies.,(,很明显）,that many students,watch TV,do sports after school,is not good for their health.,（定语从句）,(,连词表“因此”），,the students should,(,充分利用课余时间）,to do more sports to build up their bodies.,It is obvious,prefer to,rather than,which,Therefore/So/Thus,in my opinion/,to my mind/,I hold the view that/,as far as I am concerned,make good/full use of their free time,Modification-rewriting,Task 4,would rather than/would rather than,make the best/most of their spare time,Recently,I have done a survey about the daily average amount of time the students in my school spend on different after-school activities.,From Chart 1,we can learn that the students spend 96 minutes in doing their homework.Watching TV takes up 72 minutes.They spend 36 minutes listening to music and 24 minutes is spent on the computer.,However,it takes them only 12